Edgar Allan Poe Style Poem

Only just last Thursday ,I was underslept and thirsty only
Seven miles away from Sutton
On a bus that was not stopping
When I got off the bus I was nearly dropping
Each step I took was tiring and emotionally draining
Very tired after day working very hard at school
I was drowning in the darkness eyes nearly closing
I had to stay strong but something as taking over me slowly
I've got a crazy obsession with the creatures of the night
At this moment in time I was wishing the sun would just shine its bright light
Over me but I was falling into a deep deep sleep... In the middle of the street
Is anybody going to save me ?

I don't think its in the style but its scary ? :S